Sunday, October 23, 2005

To Defy Gravity (55 words)

To Defy Gravity

It's eighty-five degrees
and the harvest moon
is just a promise unkept,
dangled low and round
against the horizon, swaying
on the tips of spent corn
and sunflowers -
a sensuous redhead
rustling on a soiled stage.

I smile beneath her lies
and rise, dabbing sweat
that obeys gravity
in the depression
between my October breasts.



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21 comments:

  1. I like it, but I count 56. What is the significance of 55 any way?

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  2. Um, no... 55.

    It's some sort of thing that started out like a meme I think. Not sure, but one of the poetry carnival entrants challenged me to do it, hence, my 55 word poem :)

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  3. Val Kilmer is a poet too?

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  4. lol um, I was thinking Joyce Kilmer, but hey Val might write too?

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  5. Wow... Nice job Erin. Mine is on my site...

    Yours is so sensual and full of imagery. Very nice.

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  6. Okay, why did I count a number as two words? My bad.

    I do like this. Thanks for the explanation.

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  7. lol V there seems to be a discussion going as to whether hyphenated words are counted as one or 2 words. I figure if the word count in MSWord says one, then who am I to disagree ;)

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  8. I tend to agree with you. Hey, look at that, after 11 and I'm up. Good night.

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  9. When I read this a little while ago, I didn't see the second stanza. Did yo add it?

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  10. Hyphenated words are indeed considered one word, and, in this poet's opinion, should be.

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  11. Lol James, no sir, this has always had both stanzas. As a matter of fact, I left home this morning at 8am and just walked back in the door, so I couldn't have added a thing even if I wanted :)

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  12. Very nice Erin. Am glad you took it up. Have linked it to my site too.

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  13. Thanks .:A:.
    I think you've created another addict!
    I have yet to do the 55 word prose, maybe I'll work on that later
    :)

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  14. What a sensual/sensuous poem.
    I have an almost erotic image in my head (I hope that's okay ;)

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  15. lol that's very ok!

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  16. The harvest moon will always be a sensuous redhead to me now! I'e had a go with 55 words for Bob Dylan.

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  17. Hi there, I'm new to your site. And it's breathtaking :)

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  18. aristocrat~
    wow, breathtaking, thank you!

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  19. This realy gives me the same shivering as seeing the colors of an indian summer.

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  20. Erin- you are a master, or would that be mistress, of the miniature!

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